I am from the island of enchantment, the island of Puerto Rico. The place where humidity and heat clash perfectly and the sun always shines. I am from old bikes and epic landings. When you're falling from a bike you have to land somewhere even if that's your knees. I am from a world where people can see right through as if I were a ghost. I'm the world where I live people must think I'm a non-existent being poor I'm not important. I am from a land where there's no easy way out of anything. In this land where I live you have to fight your way through everything and our only two escapes are death or to fade of to sleep. I am from a land where you can only trust yourself. If you trust anyone but yourself you'll never get anywhere in this life.
That was a very deep poem. A lot of your things you said about life is very true in many ways
ReplyDeleteI like how right in the middle you changed the mood from all happy to reality
ReplyDeleteYou went very deep when you said "I'm a nonexistent being poor, I'm not important." That was great. Nice poem !
ReplyDeleteReally liked that you used your home place for this, should probably check the spell check on the ipad next time
ReplyDeleteDang...that is deep...and depressing. But it was a good poem...with typos. I like it.;p
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ReplyDeleteI like how you changed and elaborated on the imagery of your island of enchantment.
I like how you compared yourself to a ghost but at the end you still only trust yourself.
ReplyDeleteI liked your poem and the place seemed a bit harsh but at the same time it was a place you enjoyed and your proud of coming from.
ReplyDeleteI like how you started off saying where you from from and then describing what it was like and then went into describing yourself and how you feel in in the world. It shows a lot how you feel about where you're from and the world you live in.
ReplyDeleteYou should proofread it over again. Other than that,I liked it. I like the part where you said " I am from a land where there's no easy way out of anything."
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poetic devices and how you explained you may be non existing to other people but you have to be existing to yourself and have to be able to face tough times by yourself
ReplyDeleteI like how you said where people can see right through as if I were a ghost. People can't exactly always know you 100%. I honestly don't really think you should only trust yourself because sometimes you can be your own enemy but overall I liked it.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed your poem. I agree with you when you said to not trust anyone.
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